Re-creating my spreads on the computer

I created my three spreads on Indesign as closely to my original thumbnails as possible. Once they were  computer generated and printed out, in class we were able to spot the aspects to the designs that were and weren't working.
Overall the heading typography wasn't working as it is hard to read. Also it was suggested that instead of using paper bags on all three spreads I should mix it up and use perhaps the edge of a lunch box for one etc.

- Green graphic is too simple
- Text lined up with image
- More negative space around body text
- Body text is too many characters wide so needs to be broken into two columns.
- Photograph is good but could perhaps show more of the park

 -Better image needed
- More negative space on either side of body text
- Colour scheme is working well
-The folds in the paper bag are good

                                                                                   -Too much blue, perhaps more of the primary colours could be used
-The text needs to draw the eyes attention
- Text to be broken into two columns                                                                                    - Photograph and swirly lines are working well